Feedback on my poem please?

if love letter
smell of summer rain
lashing ink smudges, smears of canes
limp air

pair oceans piers locked unto wooden planks
give way stepping canes of birds
never fly north
, looking sea looking
under couches , rugs,
in bookshelves have been un-stocked years,
taking inventory of each missing organ
failing blood shed of blood heaving tearing swords flesh,
not bleeding.
, wonder if dead,
wonder if dead
dying

if love letter
smell of me, smell of aching bark on aching trees
smell of corpse found decaying in march
you’d mistake singed edges
break of time
half-destroyed
half-pieced
half- wish never wrote letter, never sent letter
wish never felt letter

if love letter
you’d find
busy in hiding,
hidden
caked between
clinging missing page
remnants of single word
half- not broken
still not whole
half- lost brother accident
, no accident
if loaded gun mind supplemented bullets
half- proportions don’t follow grave

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letter, found in 1980’s novel
on shelf goes un-dusted
claim author borrowed 1 of drafts
if love letter
not
you’d pretend
because not 1980
, love, gentle

if love letter
not
you’d read softly
questioning echo of voice time of day
if 30 years ago
, had come in mail
lover had loved years before
you’d open if opening skin
if had zipper, praying doesn't sting, doesn't interlock vessels of brink

bring close face
breath
smell him
smell boy
wrote letter, love her?
love
smell washington
embers forest see’s
own winter
smell temperature @ 0
fracturing
words
tire of me
take me
wrap me
in feud
sweep me flames
tire of me
write me

write of me
burn these letters
send them illiterate forest

if letter of love
pretend
edges, crumble
hold me
pages have

if love letter smell of summer rain lashing ink smudges, smears of canes limp air pair oceans piers locked unto wooden planks give way stepping canes of birds never fly north , looking sea looking under...

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